Sunday, April 22

Devilsh Listener

My bestest story!!! it is a story no real life incidents...

A new story... was planning to write one long back, but pressing requirements to prove myself saner stalled it ... now am back as me again ( in short serious, psycho and multi-faceted)...


Nicholas aka Nick the epitome of understanding... He was probably a very understanding person, because he thought before he did, he imagined himself in others place and then acted. He was caring, full of life, vibrant, exuberant, innocent, an amazing listener, who could also read minds. But as a normal human he was fallible as the next man. He was mistrusting, impatient, short tempered, a little insecure. He wasn't confident about himself, and thought he had no importance in anyone's lives. The kind of person whom you would not like to anger. Coz' he had a bad bad temper. He did not forgive or forget easily. Which I think was his strength. He had a razor sharp memory edged to perfection. He was a person who exuded confidence, the very presence of this person made things easier. A person always on his toes to find a solution. He was a best friend, and the worst foe you could find. Best friend we already understand why, Foe well we guessed it probably, cause when a person never forgives or forgets and has a temper and an ego things are better left unsaid...
So the character sketch has been drawn and you could now dig deeper into his life...

Once upon a time ( nah this not a fairy tale, it never is with nick around ) there were two close friends Nick and Adonis. Nick we have already met, and Adonis well he was Nicks close friend. A very decent guy, charming personality, right contacts right grooming...ah! the gentleman.... But hold your horses he wasnt that perfect.... When you'd get to know Adonis you'd realize how lonely he was, and he was easily crushable...the person was like a fresh flower fragile, very trusting, easily worried but with the strength of a mountain, he was rock solid but he needed support and encouragement from time to time. When hurt or upset the first thing he does is turn his back on people close to him, coz' then he looses confidence or trust in that relationship, or maybe he doesn't want to sound 'weak'. He hasnt had easy relationships agreed, also the fact that relations which build confidence deserted him, but he was lucky enough to have pillars of supports as friends like Nick behind him, but Adonis lost his trust he spurned all the comfort of them. Maybe this happened because of the fact that Nick preached a lot to Adonis sometime's repeating himself even though he knew Adonis wanted to avoid it, but things in life couldnot be avoided... There are things which need to be faced. Not everything which is faced could be solved, but nothing could be solved till it is faced. So Adonis started shying away from Nick.
He knew that yet again if he needed Nick would be there.

But Nick who had never showed his shortcomings to Adonis and had bared all this always, this time was enraged. He thought that Adonis was being childish and even though he could not completely blame him, Nick was hurt. He went to meet Adonis called him, but nothing worked. So Nick got really angry, and with his dented ego he decided to break free... No more worrying no more tensing up... He'd be there when Adonis called and would listen but no advice or anything... Nick wouldnot go and meet him or call. And Nick truly implemented that...

Whereas Nick cooled down easily, once Adonis called Nick returned to normal forgetting any thing that happened as a distant memory, what was it about Adonis that made Nick forget his ownself and beliefs he didn't know, but he felt thoroughly protective of Adonis. Nick was the first person Adonis would call in a problem, get angry upon hang up, and call again to discuss the solution received or done. But there was a twist in the tale like all fairy tales...

Whereas Nick supported Adonis throughout Adonis though had tall claims of understanding Nick he never did. He never realised Nick was insecure, didn''t think himself capable of friends, had no close friends, was over sensitive. Was very vulnerable and now very pricky to criticism which adversely affected Nick now, which he didnt bother earlier. From being a supremely confident male to a vulnerable man who started living a dual life. One in front of the people, and one the real him. It started killing Nick's spirits, it made him a recluse, a person who didnt even trust his own decisions now. He stopped giving his opinions, stopped discussing things. Because whenever he wanted or needed to talk he had himself for company.
Adonis used to say when you want to check how rich you are drop a tear and see how many hands reach to wipe it, you would have got your wealth. Nick had none. So Nick moved on in life with a fierce determination not to give up, not to loose, cause life doesnot stop at one hurdle, it slows u down to give you the momentum.

But all said and done

Adonis never felt the difference......

11 comments:

Ateet said...

This is the best!!!! I mean I loved the subtle end where the words hid the impact of so many unsaid words...The emotions are perfect to a fault...Love Nick for the strength but again u hid the entire details. While typing u abruptly ended it. Please redo it with the details

Deepshikha said...

hai ateet... I elaborated the story and now no holding back!!! all details present...so a new comment pls :)

Anonymous said...

Hey wat was the pressing requirement due to which u wrote the story so late...
an emotional story and i can smell a deep rooted psyche in it.

Anonymous said...

hey u turned the story on its head!!! an awesome story baby! some may call Nick weak or a looser I salute Nick for being the kind of person he is, but he has to learn self belief otherwise people would enjoy using him as a doormat!!

Voice said...

nicely written. u used subtle symbols
but yaar where was the story??
Without taking credits.. u r definitely creative, but i missed the story part

and i resemble nick to some extent

Deepshikha said...

hai voice sorry cdnt reply prompter have xams...
First of all credits? for wat?
Next lol i know am not creative nor do i want to be, i write from my heart not mind...i know its not literary stuff, but it makes me a good 'grey cells exercise' (not my term either ;D)...
and a story is not always drama...its a tale of two thoughts interlinked dats wat devilish' was...my take on a relation bw two ppl..and dat for me is a story :)...
but thanks for taking time out for my blog.. :)

And nicks a darling, a kind of person anyone can relate to, but is hidden amongst us all and we dont wanna acknowledge him

Voice said...

dunno much abt u but i cannot even dare to say that u r not creative. this blog also is creative becoz u created two characters [remember... so there is creativity indeed].

but yeah ;) u can tell whatever u want abt ur self :) but i cannot say one, who is more creative than me, uncreative. abhi also says u r intello

keep me updated abt ur blog updates

Deepshikha said...

voice:- ya lets leave that pointless argument coz' u cant win and i wont give up :D

lol no plans to talk abt myself, and abi is mad u didnt know dat? never trust dat guys' compliments.. definitely just u write a post pls... i made abi write now ur turn :D

Deepshikha said...

ateet: btw r u really being honest dat u liked it or not? last heard u didn't like this story of mine :)

Voice said...

ds
i know abhi more than u do :P
he is too stupid and simple to be mad. he is a good guy and never lies :P (here also he is not smart enuff to lie to me)

replying to ur comment here
ek baat boliye pls... Y exactly did he jump... i dont think to prove a point to his love or to cheat himself... Well i guess it was senseless jumping coz' no one deserves ur life more than u..

probably he wanted to make a point, probably he wanted to show how much he loved her.. probably he was tired and aimless.. but i think he wanted to estimate his worth, his worth according to that girl, this is kind of pleasure we all want to have.. by hurting ourselves to get the care and attention of our loved ones..waise i dont know much :P and i agree he shudnt jump. in the end he also realised that he shud not jump


tag is like a game of tag only. one writes on some topic, tag other and then he or she has to write and this goes on. popular among bloggers as it is fun at times.
u can start a tag too.. and consider urself tagged ... my post tagged again wala

Deepshikha said...

Hey not fair voice...please don't call my frnd abi stupid... he's too smart :D!! and dat guy doesnt lie...he is a diplomat!!
Ya he shdn have jumped, he cheated himself...

Ok so its ur time pass... ah i didnt ask dat to u to be tagged :D sorry... but thanks for the tag...so i have to write a post for u!!

am sorry but ur post wd come only on monday...